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Just an emo girl by ~Kim-1:iconKim-1:



Emo girl

Just another emo girl,
All alone in this world
Made by feelings you can't understand
Living in the darkness that is my friend

Black my eyes
And slith my wrists
Fed up with lies
I'm sorry I exist

So rip my heart
Go tear it apart,
It's already numb,hidden so deep
Locked in feelings,fallen asleep

Oh,and I'm so emo I could cry
Listening to songs about death
To this world I'd say goodbye
My paper heart will slowly die..

And I'm dieing inside,
My heart torn to shreads
In my lonelyness I hide
Oh,this nightmare never ends

I've been stabbed in the heart
From the front,from the back
I'm tired of fake loves and friends
That ripped me apart

Just another emo girl
I play the guitar and write suicide notes
There's always a reason to feel not good enough
I don't understand why life is so tough

Just another emo girl
My hair a mess,my eyes so dark
Void of feelings,void of spark

Sometimes I wish I'd be,..
As invisible as you make me feel
And if it were for me
All my wounds would heal.

All my tears fall from the sky
Please don't make me cry
Am I that unimportant to you?
There's no one to care,It must be true.

I'm just another emo girl
Passing through this superficial world
Locked in feelings of depression...
Just with hope as her possesion

I'm just another emo girl
As unperfect as can be
Just another life in this world
My emo self and me..
©2006-2009 ~Kim-1
:iconkim-1:

Author's Comments

Ok so this poem is not for the happy-go-lucky ppl who can't stand sad stuff..Oky maybe I exaggerated a bit with the sadness but anyway I wanted to write sumthin emo :) so this is it...I know some of ya feel or have felt at least some of the stuff in this poem..enjoy...I hope :D...

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:iconpsplayer06:
its a relaly good poem and awww :cuddle: lol one thing you should notice is that even tho its in the "open" category, your metre is inconsistant. in teh first bit its AbAb and the second bit is AAbb. i dont know if you noticed, but im jsut letting you know :) i think you did a relaly good job tho :) keep it up!

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:iconkim-1:
thx :D..I'll keep writing cuz I have a lot of inspiration lately anyway :)

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Being a teenager is tough, sometimes life isn't fair, other times it is, and even then I say f*ck that!
:iconpsplayer06:
aw well im happy to see that you're expressing your feelings creatively, instead of hurting yourself :)

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:iconkim-1:
yep well..it's better like this isn't it?:)

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Being a teenager is tough, sometimes life isn't fair, other times it is, and even then I say f*ck that!
:iconpsplayer06:
it is. its a lot better this way :)

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:iconkim-1:
:hug: thx

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Being a teenager is tough, sometimes life isn't fair, other times it is, and even then I say f*ck that!
:iconpsplayer06:
you're welcome :) :cuddle:

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:iconlocopunkster:
It's really reall good! The choice of word is AWESOME! Th only critique I have is your gramatical composition. You need to work on spelling mistakes, spaces, apostrophes, and where you put your periods. But yeah, your message comes across anyways, it's just to make it look more... proffesional? Lol. It's good though, good job!

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Love is anterior to life,
Posterior to death,
Initial of creation, and
The exponent of breath.

-Emily Dickinson
:iconkim-1:
thx :D..the choice of words?I think I'm running out of thoes lol..:hug: thx a bunch anyways..it's good to know that ppl actually read my poems :)

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Being a teenager is tough, sometimes life isn't fair, other times it is, and even then I say f*ck that!

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